iSCSI: Last call issues for the Naming and Discovery document

["KRUEGER,MARJORIE (HP-Roseville,ex1)" <marjorie_krueger@hp.com>]

Title: IPS-All: Reminder: 3 drafts complete last call this week

Some cleanup items for the iSCSI Naming and Discovery document:

 

1) Sec.1 p.5 and p. 14 define "iSCSI Address" but contradict each other.  p. 5 defines it as simply and IP address [& port] and p. 14 says it's the iSCSI name and IP addr [+port].  Paragraph 5 needs to be modified to match p. 14.

 

2) Sec. 1 p. 17 says

 

In this example, Robert's SSN is like the iSCSI Name, his phone number and addresses are analogous to the TCP addresses which make up an iSCSI session, and "Robert Smith" would be a human-friendly label for this person.

The statement that Robert Smith's addresses are like an iSCSI session makes no sense to me.  An iSCSI session is a relationship between two separate iSCSI nodes.  Robert's addresses are only one end of the relationship.  Perhaps this paragraph means to say his phone number, etc. are like an iSCSI nodes TCP addresses?

 

3) Sec. 1.1 p. 1 first sentence "iSCSI has given the Organizational naming authority additional flexibility by permitting it to hand out local naming authority to
   subordinate organizations."

 

I suggest changing this to "The iSCSI naming scheme was constructed to give an organizational naming authority the flexibility to further subdivide the responsibility for name creation to subordinate naming authorities."  Use of "capital O" in Organization implies there's some globally defined naming authority that this sentence is referring to. 

 

4) General comment on section 1.1  To reflect the definition in the iSCSI main draft, sec. 2.2.6.3.2,  either the examples need to be changed to show the ":" after the reversed domain name in the string, or the text needs to be changed to say that these substrings are sub-domain names.

 

5)sec. 1.1, p 15 - this example is missing the ":" following the reversed domain name.

 

6)sec. 3, p 1 - the last sentence is missing something.  It's "Moreover, iSCSI discovery  mechanism only deals with target discovery and one still needs to use  the SCSI protocol for LUN discovery." and should be "Moreover, the iSCSI discovery  mechanisms listed here only deal with target discovery and one still needs to use the SCSI protocol for LUN discovery."

 

7) sec. 3 p 2 - 2nd sentence is missing something. It's "The goal of iSCSI discovery mechanism is to provide low overhead support for small iSCSI setups, and scalable discovery solutions for large enterprise setups." and should be "The goal of iSCSI discovery  mechanisms are to provide low overhead support for small iSCSI setups, and scalable discovery solutions for large enterprise setups." 

 

8) sec. 3, p 5  the sentence "This mechanism assumes that the IP address and TCP port information are already available to the initiator." is missing something, should be "This mechanism assumes that the target's IP address and TCP port information are already available to the initiator."

 

9) appendix B.3, I think there's a typo in the first sentence.  "This gateway presents logical targets (iSCSI Names) to the initiators, and maps them to real iSCSI targets as it chooses." should be "This gateway presents logical targets (iSCSI Names) to the initiators, and maps them to SCSI targets as it chooses."

10)  appendix B.4 another typo?  "An iSCSI proxy is a SCSI gateway..." should be "An iSCSI proxy is an iSCSI gateway.."

 

11) appendix B.5, p 4 refers to a "DMZ"  There is no definition of this term in this document.  Needs to either be defined or substitute some more descriptive phrase here.

 

Regards,

Marjorie Krueger
Networked Storage Architecture
Networked Storage Solutions
Hewlett-Packard