Some cleanup items for the iSCSI Naming
and Discovery document:
1) Sec.1 p.5 and p. 14 define "iSCSI
Address" but contradict each other. p. 5 defines it as simply and
IP address [& port] and p. 14 says it's the iSCSI name and IP addr
[+port]. Paragraph 5 needs to be modified to match p.
14.
2) Sec. 1 p. 17
says
In this example, Robert's SSN is like the iSCSI Name,
his phone number and addresses are analogous to the TCP addresses which make
up an iSCSI session, and "Robert Smith" would be a human-friendly label for
this person.
The
statement that Robert Smith's addresses are like an iSCSI session makes no
sense to me. An iSCSI session is a relationship between two separate
iSCSI nodes. Robert's addresses are only one end of the
relationship. Perhaps this paragraph means to say his phone number, etc.
are like an iSCSI nodes TCP addresses?
3) Sec. 1.1 p. 1 first sentence "iSCSI has given the Organizational naming authority additional
flexibility by permitting it to hand out local naming authority
to
subordinate organizations."
I
suggest changing this to "The iSCSI naming scheme was constructed to give an
organizational naming authority the flexibility to further subdivide the
responsibility for name creation to subordinate naming authorities." Use
of "capital O" in Organization implies there's some globally defined naming
authority that this sentence is referring to.
4)
General comment on section 1.1 To reflect the definition in the iSCSI
main draft, sec. 2.2.6.3.2, either the examples need to be changed to
show the ":" after the reversed domain name in the string, or the text needs
to be changed to say that these substrings are sub-domain
names.
5)sec. 1.1, p 15 - this example is missing the ":" following the
reversed domain name.
6)sec. 3, p 1 - the last sentence is missing something.
It's "Moreover, iSCSI
discovery mechanism only deals with target discovery and one still needs
to use the SCSI protocol for LUN discovery." and
should be "Moreover, the iSCSI discovery mechanisms listed
here only deal with target discovery and one still needs to use the
SCSI protocol for LUN discovery."
7) sec. 3 p
2 - 2nd sentence is missing something. It's "The
goal of iSCSI discovery mechanism is to provide low overhead support for small
iSCSI setups, and scalable discovery solutions for large enterprise setups."
and should be "The goal of iSCSI discovery
mechanisms are to provide low overhead support for small iSCSI
setups, and scalable discovery solutions for large enterprise
setups."
8) sec. 3, p
5 the sentence "This mechanism assumes that the IP address and TCP port
information are already available to the initiator." is missing something,
should be "This mechanism assumes that the target's IP address and
TCP port information are already available to the
initiator."
9) appendix
B.3, I think there's a typo in the first sentence. "This gateway presents logical
targets (iSCSI Names) to the initiators, and maps them to real iSCSI targets
as it chooses." should be "This gateway presents
logical targets (iSCSI Names) to the initiators, and maps them to SCSI targets
as it chooses."
10)
appendix B.4 another typo? "An iSCSI proxy is a SCSI
gateway..." should be "An iSCSI proxy is an iSCSI
gateway.."
11) appendix
B.5, p 4 refers to a "DMZ" There is no definition of this term in this
document. Needs to either be defined or substitute some more descriptive
phrase here.
Regards,
Marjorie
Krueger
Networked Storage Architecture
Networked Storage
Solutions
Hewlett-Packard
